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Awesome! :roll: I really liked it. The style was wonderful. The short paragraphs and almost complete dialog really did it. It kept me interested, and I kept wanting to read ...

Loved the wording. :D I gave me a great image of the poem. Nice job! :mrgreen:

I agree with Rachet Writer, is a great short story, and not much room for corrections. :D Although, I don't see how you would continue, but think of some ways ...

To many boxes. :? I was good, but a little repetitive. I didn't see any mistakes, which is good. Maybe you should put the box lines together. :? :)

I became very hungry while reading :) :lol: It was a good piece, though I have to side with the above. Very abstract and strange. :? :)

Wonderful! I was so romantic, I loved the first couple of stanzas. I didn't see anything wrong, but then again, I suck at poetry, so I don't know whats good ...

I liked how it rhymed, and the style. It was short, a little to short. Maybe if you had added some more, it would have been just right. But other ...

Hard to critique, but it was a nice piece. It kind of confused me at some points, but that didn't make it bad. :? :)

Beautiful! :) I was very good, but I have to agree with the above. :? :)

I really liked the style. You did a good job. Is the title supposed Untitled, is it that on purpose? :? :)

Very nice. I am a big Legend of Zelda fan. I really liked it, good wording and conversation. But I'll have to agree with the above. :? :)

It is kinda long, but It was readable. :) I like it, But I'll say the same thing I said in Chapter 2. Although its in the Naruto world, try ...

All of the above! :lol: I have to agree with Ink on this one. Itachi being nice? :? Ayumi and the Byakugan? :? some of it was to unbelievable. Hope ...

I guess you saw what I said about Chapter 4. This one gave me an idea of what happened in the forth, but I'll still have to read the other. ...

Thanks Lucky. :D It was very sweet and heartfelt. But I have to agree with Meevs, it can't really be critiqued. :? It was kind of childish, and something I ...